Chaand Ki Baarish
Pic: Lonavala Trip
Kal raat der talak barsaat hoti rahi
mano chaand pighal raha ho
dheeme dheeme tapak raha tha falak se
barasti rahi chaandani toot kar
aur ab ye aalam hai ki,
ghar ke saamne wali sadak bhar gayi hai chaand se
ghar me mere bhi kuch cheete khidki par jame hain
neeche hi kisi ne tashtari me saja liya hai
rakh liya hai quaid karke chaand ka ek tukda
aur kuch bachcho ne uchhal diya hai kood kar
khwahish ko ek doosre ke upar
dekha to wo sarobar ho gaye the
usi chaand me jo pighal kar toota tha kal raat
intezaar kar raha hoon is baar
kab tootega doosra chaand dubara
to main bhi apni khidki pe
tashtari rakh, chaand ko kamre me le aoonga
-Varun
Chaand ki basrish………. Abhi aap ki iss kavitaa pe cmmnt karne k liye meri kalam chhoti pad rahi hai. Kehte hai “Jahaan na pahunche ravi(sun) wahan pahunche kavi.” Sahi me ek behtarin kavi ki soch iss kavitaa me ubhar kar aati hai. Aur dua hai ki Vrun ko uss ka chaand jald hi mil jaaye…
1sundar bahut sundar varun…………….ye chand ki barish …………..ye bikhri hui chandni……………….. kahti hai kuchh is kadar bekaraar ho ………bas..samet lo yu bahoon me……………har aalam …..har manzar khushnuma ho jaye…………………….beautifulllllllllllllllll barish aur us ko sametne ki baal sulabh maansikta………………jo bachpan ki yaad dila deti hai……………… hai na dear
2wonderful poem dear…very nice..
3bahut sundar….
4beautiful poem like always ……
5Bahut hi sundar barsat hai Chand Ki……………. very nice……..
6nice poetry….
7last 4 lines r too good……………..
8hey……….cool photography dis time……………….tashtari mein chaand…………wow!……..bahut achcha dikhta hoga naa?
9wah har baa ki tarah is baar bhi ek dam nayapan hai kavita hai….padh kar aisa lgta hai maano….ki chaand aur us sadak ki tasvee saamne aa gai hai…us tarah jis tarah dekhaya hai tumne apni kavita me….wonderful…keep it up…..Chaand to aap hai hin..aur dua hai humari…chaandi se jald hi mulakaat ho jaaye tumhari..
10bahut khub ” varun ji.” sundar rachana. aapko jald hi aapka chand mil jaye……………:-)
11If the radiance of a thousand suns wr 2 burst at once into the sky
12it wud be like dis…a splash of joy a n apark of spirit…xpressd with such an ease!! d pic just brightens it up evn more…may u get wot u wish
wonderfully expressed “baarish” and surrounded emotions…
13itni shiddat se jiski talaash tumhaari rooh ko hai……..khuda kare tumhaari ummeedon se bhi zyaada tumhaari jholi mein woh daal jaaye…….may God’’s shower of blessings fill ur life like the rain ……aur jald hi woh chand tumhaare dil ke tashthari pe tumhein yun dikh jaaye, ….ke tumhaari har khwaahish ki manzil tumhein isimein aake khatm hoti dikhayi de….
14Very nice…chand ki baarish itni khoobsoorat hogi socha na tha…$
15kya baat hai Varun… aise Emotions.. aur fir is khubsurti se unhe roop dena… gr8 dear… agreed to Sarita…realy gulzar like free verse pattern… God bless U dear…
16the atmosphere evoked by your poem reminds me of keats” line “Was it a vision, or a waking dream?”….. wonderful gulzarlike free verse pattern….great poem…
17lovly .chand ko tastri bhar ghar layege,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, bachpan yad aaagaya…….
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