Shivali was just sitting in her chair hoping Kapil would call. She was reading a book but her mind was wandering ..it was like just the other day they had got married despite lot of opposition from relatives and parents. Shivali had met Kapil at a Coffee shop .He kept staring at her as he sipped his coffee ,his favourite cafe mocha.
She had come alone ,that day without her friend. She wondered .why is he staring at me ..or is he looking at someone else. She thought that she had average looks and height and also glasses.But often everyone had praises for her expressive doe like eyes which she hid with her glasses.
As she was reading , he came over ..and she nearly fell off her seat ..he was devastatingly cute. Not the traditional Tall ,D, H types…but there was something which just pulled her towards him.
He just chatted away the normal way after introducing that he was working since a year in a software firm in Bangalore.She had few words to mutter as his rambling chatter just mesmerised her .Was she falling in love ….she felt she was walking in the clouds …was this her man …in her dreams…..?????
To be Contd…….
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GOOD STORY, NICE IMAGINATION!!!!
nice story..
Raj
http://bharatmelange.blogspot.com
hi i m navi app likte bahut acha hai hume pasand hai
very good bye bye
gud start but luv so soon….. waiting to read more…
Introduction is quite impressive…. eagar to read more…
NICE
short but sweet.
Nice…
Nice…
Nice…
excellent post
excellent starting………… plz keep going………… nd my name is also ria……… by d way frm where have u got d idea 4 dis story………… u can give me reply my id is aratrika90@gmail.com………….. i,ll b waiting 4 u………..
Good start .. Keep going………
hmmmm…..looking forward to…wot happens nxt….this chance meetin….starin….little conversation….leading to marraige ….and then fallin apart….is it the case???
well ria,it seems good to hear all this bt being a guy i knw most of the guys stare gals,n this al is just attraction or a kinda crush u cn say….
Bt in sm cases in the longrun love happens between the couple,so just carry on n try to explore him n if he really really loves u
Good Start, please try to complete at the earliest.
plz complete the story…….so that we can give our feedbacks
VERY GOOD STORY
Dear, what was d cost of coffee? in future it will become d most horrible & expensive coffee in her life, is it true? reply me.
Congrats for being on Rediff Home page……………Enjoy
good story RIA,you know what,it is my life that you wrote.expected more from you.risuddha_bkp@rediffmail.com
good story ria,u know what it”s like my story u wrote.
Bahut hi khubsurat hai……..
keep writing…..good thought
VERY GOOD………………..BEAUTIFUL……………………..I LIKE IT………..
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hi, Isn”t this common stuff for a start?? What matters is the committment for rest of the life— Lets see !!
May Be…
Love is love undefine by anyone…
Atul Sir..
congrets you ae on front page………….enjoy post more nice posts
very nice
Well, it is known to all, that story,especially a short story contains an open ending. So, it would be better, if you did not write “To be Contd…….”
very good
good story……….when the next will be coming
hi ria ur thought is vry beautiful like ur name. just keep writing.
wat’’s next
eagerly waiting for the next page
Hi, ria its realy very interesting start ,best wishes.
Nice story not bad
wonderfull post to ria
nice start dear. starting wid a gud note and ending in a curosity
hey gud start…whts next…..
Good start .. Keep going.. All the best..
sirjee good one.. very anxious to read further..
Ria…Rediff ke home page par aane ki badhai….all the best
wht next??
hi, ria good start keepgoing.thanks with love.
nice start….con8s u r on front page…
sweet start… pls keep this on….
Good starting.
Nice narration. Love at first sight very rare. Gift from God.