Ek Ek kar dana
Gharonda yeh banaya
Pyaar ka woh saaya
Guldaste mein naa koi gulab
Aansu phir bhi naa koi
Dhadkan samjhe dusre ki
Aankhe bole har baat
Pyaar kuch aisa ho ..
Naa koi aahat
Naa koi ekraar
Saawan ki nahi chahat
Dil jhume
Rona naa chahe
Par aansu phir bhi chalak jaaye
I am trying to explore a new n contemporary style of writing poems. Pls do give ur valuable feedback, that will help me check myself..
lav, thumhara poem vv.nice., u pl. keep on posting such..i liked v.much..
aansu fir bhi chalak jaaye—-kitni sacchai hai is khwaish me.
bahut sundar hai kavita.
any style is beautiful if it touches your heart——this poem does.
dil khol kar likhiye—-ankhe moond kar sochiye—-man ki tarango se—–bhavon ko behne deejiye—–jab shabd khatm ho jaayen , to nishabd man ki awaaz se chand puhpit hoenge.
ati sundar hai aapka prayaas
wah! wah! badiyaan hai.
Bahot badhiyaan…..!!!! loved your way of expression in this poem… Jhoot nahi kehraha hoon bhai…..
nice poem
Very nice attempt Lav… Bahut hi gehri baat likhi tumne… keep trying dekhna bahut jald tum aur jada fluently likh paoge is style main… par Bro… “na koi ahaat” to thik hai… par “na koi ekraar” nahi chalta yaar na kehne bawajood verbal ekraar chahiye hota hai…. thats what I think….. ye nmaine apne relationship main kai bar experience kiya hai…!!!
Nice attempt!