For Fountainahas the night before Good Friday was a watershed in its rather uneventful history; many years after that fateful night, women in the neighborhood would habitually use it as a point of reference to establish facts: so-and-so's age for example. 'Oh! Don't you remember? She was almost knee high that Good Friday!' That night as Maggie lay on her bed fiddling with the safety pins that dangled from her bangles; her mind refused captivity. It strayed to the exact moment that afternoon when she'd bumped into Jacinto on her way to the bakery. She'd briefly dated the nerdy boy when they were both at the University. Thereafter, he'd left for some godforsaken country carved out of the erstwhile
'Magpie! Is that you?' is how he'd called out to her. But for the endearment she'd have had no clue about the identity of this man.
'Oh Jacinto! Is that you?' she'd almost cried in astonishment, 'after all these years!'
'Doctor Jacinto Machado,' he'd corrected her with a shy smile. She could see that he was genuinely pleased to see her; she was a tad embarrassed, but glad nonetheless. They'd spent the next quarter of an hour talking about loved ones gained and lost, his divorce, her loneliness, how she still looked young and the beauty of the Uzbek countryside. She was amazed at how little the intervening years showed on him. He was still muscular'' a slight paunch notwithstanding''his hair was still the same shade of coal, and he had retained his painfully shy demeanor. As they parted he'd extracted a promise from her for a visit to his clinic on the main street.
Just as Maggie rose to switch the lights off, they went off on their own and the noisy fan stopped whirring. She could hear the Lopes' twins from the second floor shriek at the top of their voices; they would yell twice as loud whenever the power was restored. Convinced that a fuse was blown, Maggie struggled to find a torch in the darkness. As her eyes grew accustomed to the inkiness around her, she saw the metallic torch glistening eerily in the moonlight that crept in through the window. She hastily slipped a stole over her nightgown and walked busily toward the door with the torch's narrow beam dictating her measured walk. As she opened the door, she was taken aback at the sights her eyes took in.
She could clearly see at least six burly policemen running up the wooden staircase. They were shouting instructions in Konkani to the remaining men who stood in the courtyard. Some of the men spread out around the Villa in some pattern that made no sense to her. She could hear their enormous dogs growling and barking; the shouts of her tenants added to the chaos. Maggie could clearly hear Sandra calling out for Mia''asking her to stop. Her heart missed a beat as she saw a man climb over the first floor grille, dangle there for some unsure seconds and finally jump into the courtyard. The policemen cursed from the first floor after the man and the men in the courtyard grappled the daredevil not before some gunshots were fired in the air. The cries of the womenfolk of Grace Villa woke up the entire neighborhood as the lights miraculously came on: both in the Villa and in the terracotta-roofed houses around it.
Maggie's pupils got smaller and smaller until she could say for sure that the defeated man who was presently handcuffed was
'Don't take my Laurie away from me! What has he done? He is innocent why don't you listen to me? Please don't take him please,' she pleaded with the men in uniform, 'Laurie! Why don't you tell them that you can do no wrong what will happen to our child Laurie? Oh God please!' she fell to the ground as
Back in Sandra's apartment, Mia had locked herself in her bedroom. As Maggie sat the beleaguered mother at the table, she could hear the girl sob. She felt a pang of guilt at first, but deep down she resented Sandra for her sloppy style of parenting. A mother who hasn't a clue what her teenaged daughter is up to is no good. She'd read in magazines about how rebellious the girls are these days. The kind of questions that the agony aunt fielded made her puke: teen pregnancy, oral sex, drugs, late night parties, and orgies. Most of these girls weren't even past twenty and were unapologetic about the lifestyle they chose. They saw it as cool, liberating''the kind who would have been branded forward in her youth. But even them forward girls were chaste compared to these stupid nymphs! She saw no sense why many women equated behaving crassly like men with liberation.
'I knew that bastard was upto some mischief,' said Sandra her reddened eyes brimming with tears, 'tell me Mag where did I go wrong? Am I a bad mother?'
'Hell no Sandra! Whatever gave you that idea? You have been a good mother; I've seen the sacrifices you've made for your girl. '
'And yet this is what I get in return my daughter carrying the seed of a useless drug peddler. Oh Mag, the stupid girl won't relent for an abortion! She wants to keep it as a sign of her lo ' Sandra couldn't complete the sentence as she cried a river.
'
'Mag, what is your point?'
'I am making it
'What about the child? What will people say! A single mother is no good is what they'll whisper at street corners. Like mother like daughter! Who will wed her Mag? Christ! How will I find a good boy for her if she waddles all over Fountainahas with a bump? She says she'll slit her wrists if I force an abortion.'
Maggie rose from the table and walked toward the bedroom. She turned the door knob. Surprised by the unlocked door she softly walked inside to find Mia fast asleep. Her face was stained with tears; so was her pillow. She drew a sheet closely over Mia and softly kissed her forehead. The girl looked very innocent, almost angelic save for the tears for angels always smiled. It broke Maggie's heart that the lord above would be so harsh on such a fragile girl. As she closed the door behind her, a new resolve added sheen to her face.
She stood by the window and gazed at the full moon. Her eyes narrowed and her jaw tightened as she charted out a neat plan. In the distance she could hear the church bells ring a dozen times. Still standing by the window, she finally turned to face Sandra.
'Sandra, listen to me carefully. I have a cousin in Valpoi, Cecilia is her name; she lives alone in a pleasant house. She is a god-fearing woman and I am sure she'll take good care of Mia.'
'What do you mean?'
'You know what I mean
'Wait a minute Mag,' Sandra shut her eyes tight and pressed her forehead grimacing all the while, 'and I always thought you were a rational woman. You are as stupid as that girl if not more. You want her to deliver that illegitimate child! What after that? Leave it for good in some pile of garbage? Spend the rest of its life fighting a stigma? Tell me Mag!'
'I'll adopt the baby.'
'Mag, you can't be serious! Why would you do that? Why would anyone do such a stupid thing?'
'I dunno
As the first rays of the morning sun filtered in through the window, Maggie could see a million motes whirling like dervishes in a narrow beam of light. Memories of last night's dream came back to her as fresh as just scribbled ink.
The Zorroesque face was no longer a mystery and the recent addition–a cute cherub–completed the sunset postcard askew with colors.
Finis
the story didnt make sense PF but the narration was so vivid ‘’saftey pins and bangles…so typical and so real”
Hi!!!
It’’s really pleasyre to read this blog…..
Nice story……………
Waiting for next writeup …Good Job
no chance- not boring atall- u have a great capacity to narrate and we all simply swallow all that u write here . waiting for the next post
Boring is never I would associate with your brand of story telling. Amazing man yet another good story but yes I agree with Shikha the end was not as good as the beginning.
pf bhau, it is so damn good to read your stories no matter how long one has been away. but then why do i get a trifling sensation that there is a focus lost somewhere through this!!! and if you don”t mind an innocent critique - “really, they should be condemned to some hedonistic hell” … am not sure if this would be a line normally spoken given the situation. … but seriously saabji, reading you is a real pleasure. … cheerios, ps..st
such a lovely start but what a disappointing end .. were you in a hurry or something … u write so damn well … this was another great one till u decided to just wrap it up:(
Just Wow boss! You are blessed to be able to write so well…
What a way! What a story! Brilliant!
I enjoyed your language skills. You have an eye for detail and the words to describe them. BTW, do you have a profile in sulekha?
brilliant… man you can write.. and you have such a choice of phrases…. sheer brilliance…
got me cliff-hanging, though the end missed on something…dunno what exactly…i cud read on and on…but the end was-bit abrupt. And certainly a good work on thhis…kp up!!!
hmmm u a goan by any chance?:)btw is d polish movie u ref. to called “my name is Justine”..was shaken fr a few days after i watched it.
very confusing review…..any how, i liked it!
nice.. T
why boring ???long read makes good time spending on a good article.it could have been little cripsy with little editing…but still it is good..writer has allways his own view.
Hmmm…seems like u were in a hurry to finish it offf!…well missed the crisp outstanding one liners i used to pick up from your reads……but still seeing u back is a deeeeeeeeeliteeeee……..this was an Ok one…and am still waiting 4 u to come back in to the groove…..am myself out of sync with blogging since a long time….just taking my own sweet time..hehehe…..cheers!…TC.
well…ya, its nt PF of the yore…bt still, ur command over d language is brilliant…kudos…
I don”t agree with Kush babu at all. Anyways, kitsch is a very relative concept. (When the Brits when came to India, they found the Kathak dance kitschy and crass. So it depends. lolz) What I like about this story is the milieu that is created around the characters. This story, again had the power of taking me to ”that” place… almost felt I was one of the blokes in the neighborhood.
Loved the story and really nice to see a happy ending there…your style, narration, language are great as always…just one small thing I noticed about one of the characters…well probably coz i got too involved…found something a bit contradicting…probably you did that on purpose…will ask u later abt it…but enjoyed it overall…PF u r really too good
Lovely closing lines, PF…this was a nice, positive end to the story. But I”d like to see the old PF back (and soon).
The story teller is mellowing. I like it. I like stories with nice endings.
ah well! let me see… from the critic’’s point of view… it does remind me of similar stories … but then a writer’’s idea does get a bit influenced subconsciously by other ideas tht kinda appeal to you…
blogger’’s point…i liked it since it did not have a sad ending that has become the fashion nowadays… i have been so upset with jhumpa lahiri’’s “interpreter of maladies”…. sadness all the way…ughhh! ur concluding part was neatly written… and did not aim for all weird kind of twists thats so common nowadays! i liked it because of that!
kitsch crassly contrived! u can do better.