It had been building over time.
The fire collapsing into the water pulling it upwards till the difference blurred.
And then the heavens opened up with deluge of an eternity's wait, awakening the parched earth.
Thus she was born.
"So, its true. It is a she." Her father smirked, replacing the speck of pink flesh back into the cradle.
"Yes." Her mother answered, head bowed in acceptance of an unforgivable transgression perpetrated in her womb.
As 'Sita' grew up, the seed of light burst out of her in brilliant flashes of innocence, briefly illuminating the murk around. It worried her mother to know that 'Sita' was destined to fly. And fly so high that even if she stretched her hands and tried to hold 'Sita' in her arms, she wouldn't succeed. She felt a sense of duty and reverence towards this curious fruit of providence. So in her own quiet determined way she attempted to hide 'Sita' from the evil eyes of the predators surrounding her.
Besides, her own life had been snatched away from her and held hostage to the whims of men. She didn't want the vicious cycle to be repeated again for she knew how precious 'Sita' was. She remembered the day when she first learnt that her dignity of existence could be ripped to shreds for no reason. It was the day she felt the searing hot hollow of nothingness, as she was accused of being a sinner, a rotten characterless whore bound to sleep with the entire village, a slut without any respect for the family name. All this because she had flying kites with some boys and had been better at it than them.
….To be continued…
You never did, did you? … I mean, continue … as you promised … never mind, now you have posted again … have waited and waited … don”t disappear again … please? … a small request? … tell us more about Sita and her mother …
Another sensitive topic held with such delicacy n pain…
gr8 going….
The last line needs a grammar-check. Must have missed ur over-worked eyes. A reminder: A very good start. Do me one favor…………….. Just keep writing!
” searing hollow” is fine. “Hot” seems superfluous. “rotten characterless” is ..hmmm….a bit too easy going. lacks the gravity of conviction which I feel is of essence here.
You start is fantastic. I am even thinking of a part on Draupadi, Kunti, Ahalya…and other such tainted and much maligned female characters coming from u….as a sequel. That would be something!! Novel and Grand!
beginning to get the hang of things…and already, “curious fruit of providence. “…seems great!
looks like a good start. I am waiting for the next instalment
is this ur take on the ramayan?! or atleast a part of it… well u”ve begun well.. the starting lines so simple and yet so complex at the same time. Waitn…
a good beginning….
flying kites and called a whore?!?! whoa whoa… shud have spent some more time with this one and thought of something better than flying kites… hehehe… anyway, great piece!